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In 2148, After the attack of a strange virus to human genetics, a blind man, and a handicapped woman teams up to lead an army against immunes to bring justice.
I think it could benefit from singular protagonist and a clear goal- "After a genetic war leaves the less privileged with irreversible physical damage, a blind boxer leads other victims to obtain the vaccine supply for newborns, hoarded by the immuned rich" Beware!! it's an overused premise
I think it could benefit from singular protagonist and a clear goal-
“After a genetic war leaves the less privileged with irreversible physical damage, a blind boxer leads other victims to obtain the vaccine supply for newborns, hoarded by the immuned rich”
Beware!! it’s an overused premise
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One more thing: There are two reasons to ask a question...1: To get an answer, but the reader doesn't know the answer.2: Because it is rhetorical, But rhetorical assumes the answer is obvious but since the reader doesn't know what the cost is, it isn't rhetorical either.As a result, asking a questioRead more
One more thing: There are two reasons to ask a question…
1: To get an answer, but the reader doesn’t know the answer.
2: Because it is rhetorical, But rhetorical assumes the answer is obvious but since the reader doesn’t know what the cost is, it isn’t rhetorical either.
As a result, asking a question that is neither rhetorical or nor something the reader can answer adds no information to the logline and is just confusing.
I would try to write a version of this logline without the tagged on question?at the end, and add the stakes into the logline so the reader knows what the possible cost could be if the lead character messes with the timeline.
See lessAfter learning his mother is dying due to lack of healthcare coverage and money, a promising med student abruptly quits school to compete in a dangerous TV show offering $1 million to the lone survivor who is still alive at the end of the game.
I like the implied conflict between the med student's future career as a doctor juxtaposed to his lack of faith in the very healthcare system that would sustain him. As others have said, logline is a bit wordy, but that's an easy fix. Interesting and timely concept!
I like the implied conflict between the med student’s future career as a doctor juxtaposed to his lack of faith in the very healthcare system that would sustain him. As others have said, logline is a bit wordy, but that’s an easy fix. Interesting and timely concept!
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