1. Posted: June 12, 2017In:

    A mentally unstable young couple from Appalachia reminisces about forging a bond of protection and an unorthodox family in the face of suicidal, homicidal, and familial strife in the slums of Los Angeles.

    dpg Singularity

    So... what's the plot, the objective goal? What do they do about their situation other than reminisce?

    So… what’s the plot, the objective goal?

    What do they do about their situation other than reminisce?

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  2. Posted: June 11, 2017In:

    Rework: When cops are killed in a series of murders, the investigator must catch the contract killer and his employer before they get to his family.

    RussellN Samurai

    Thanks for the suggestions folks. How's this: ?As Galactic Police become victims in a series of murders, the Homicide Investigator must catch the contract killer and the mastermind, to protect his own family.

    Thanks for the suggestions folks. How’s this: ?As Galactic Police become victims in a series of murders, the Homicide Investigator must catch the contract killer and the mastermind, to protect his own family.

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  3. Posted: June 3, 2017In:

    Reword #2: When she is abducted by her estranged father so she can be spared, a stubborn humanitarian must find a way to prevent him from killing most of humanity.

    1yzzy75 Logliner

    I still think that a word or two about what she will be spared from needs to be added.

    I still think that a word or two about what she will be spared from needs to be added.

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