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Two career tramps, a yachtsman and an ex-actress, falling in love team up and live swindling the jet set ? but they risk losing it all when yachtsman?s ex-wife comes undercover for an IRS sting
I'd drop 'career tramps'. ?Tramps tends to bring about images of homeless and this conflicts with the jetset image. Otherwise I can see your movie. ?Perhaps ground it in a time and place. ?Specific details can be a friend. ?You could even drop the detail about their relationship. Saves some words, gRead more
I’d drop ‘career tramps’. ?Tramps tends to bring about images of homeless and this conflicts with the jetset image.
Otherwise I can see your movie. ?Perhaps ground it in a time and place. ?Specific details can be a friend. ?You could even drop the detail about their relationship.
Saves some words, give you more room for story. ?Unlike my fellow reviewers I don’t see the need for likable characters. ?I think compelling characters are more important than likable people. ?Remember the logline is the shortest path through your story in the most interesting and engage path.
Character development etc is for your treatment or synopsis.
Try this (less than 30 words).
‘A yachtsman and an ex-actress, live the high life swindling the jet set, but danger arrives in the form of his ex-wife working undercover for the IRS.’
See lessWhen a recluse yachtsman gets charmed by an ex actress he discovers she is a career tramp just like him. Teaming up they mingle and swindle the jet set living the high-life until recluses ex returns to renew love and revenge as an undercover IRS sting
Think there's a little too much setup and no motivation, a recluse tends not to mingle. A man and his ex-celebrity actress lover live swindling the Jetset until his ex-girlfriend reappears as part of an IRS sting. Plus IRS may be the wrong agency, swindles normally don't attract Tax issues as much aRead more
Think there’s a little too much setup and no motivation, a recluse tends not to mingle.
A man and his ex-celebrity actress lover live swindling the Jetset until his ex-girlfriend reappears as part of an IRS sting.
Plus IRS may be the wrong agency, swindles normally don’t attract Tax issues as much as they would Police attention.
Hope this helps.
See lessA self absorbed movie director is forced to take the investigation is his own hands after becoming murder suspect when all of the leading actresses from his previous movies are getting killed within a week after each movie’ premiere
Agreed with Richiev the order of the descriptions should match the order of the events in the plot - inciting incident first goal last. I'll add that it's a bit hard to believe he can solve the murders himself with no prior experience, perhaps then make him a crime thriller director. Directing a criRead more
Agreed with Richiev the order of the descriptions should match the order of the events in the plot – inciting incident first goal last. I’ll add that it’s a bit hard to believe he can solve the murders himself with no prior experience, perhaps then make him a crime thriller director. Directing a crime thriller is no qualification but can at least hint that he did some research and learned about the world he’s about to dive head first into. This could also indicate that he will rely on tropes and cliches? which could result in some funny or awkward moments for him.
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