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When one of his tenants is found murdered, a young and na?ve landlord must find a killer lurking in a secret part of the building, or risk bankruptcy.
Hello, I like the concept, a sort of 'phantom of the building'!?My personal opinion is that you should cut or rewrite the elements that are not directly linked to the plot - "young" is not interesting because it doesn't relate to the rest of the story. "Naive" too is a very week characterization. AnRead more
Hello, I like the concept, a sort of ‘phantom of the building’!?My personal opinion is that you should cut or rewrite the elements that are not directly linked to the plot – “young” is not interesting because it doesn’t relate to the rest of the story. “Naive” too is a very week characterization. Anyway, I think that a landlord investigating the death of his tenant is a clear, straigh, good concept. You can start working in deep on this story. I suggest you to build the story from the end: what or who is the killer? When you will have developped your story a little more, I’m sure you’ll be able to define your hero better.
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Why? Why must he stop the rich from getting hooked on a drug?
Why?
Why must he stop the rich from getting hooked on a drug?
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Agreed with all the above comments. In order to help simplify the concept, I think best if you choose one job in which he wakes up and tell the story around that. This way you can use the first time he wakes up in the middle of a future mission as his inciting incident.
Agreed with all the above comments.
In order to help simplify the concept, I think best if you choose one job in which he wakes up and tell the story around that. This way you can use the first time he wakes up in the middle of a future mission as his inciting incident.
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