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A once indulgent father now battles his spoiled children who are stealing his retirement money.
Even if you don't want to cover off the inciting incident, it may be good to put it into a scenario to give it context. ?What is motivating his battle with his children? ?Perhaps just a "After discovering that adult children have been stealing his retirement money a (potential description) has to doRead more
Even if you don’t want to cover off the inciting incident, it may be good to put it into a scenario to give it context. ?What is motivating his battle with his children? ?Perhaps just a “After discovering that adult children have been stealing his retirement money a (potential description) has to do battle (what does that look like) to get his money back.
The “do battle” is that a court room drama or a family fight. ?His he scamming them to get his money back or just arguing his head off. ?Cramming all this into a few lines is very difficult.
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Thanks for the reviews guys. I haven't been on here for awhile so it's cool to read the feedback. Much appreciated!
Thanks for the reviews guys. I haven’t been on here for awhile so it’s cool to read the feedback. Much appreciated!
See lessEBABE finds success selling on Eworld Auctions, but now her life’s become a strange “eVenture.”
The play on the word adventure ("eVenture") is okay -- but not sufficient.? It's more of a blurb,?something that?teases?an audience, less??than a substantive?logline that?tells ?a movie producer what the plot is. That is,? it ?sets up a situation (sort of) for a story, but fails to clearly?indicateRead more
The play on the word adventure (“eVenture”) is okay — but not sufficient.? It’s more of a blurb,?something that?teases?an audience, less??than a substantive?logline that?tells ?a movie producer what the plot is. That is,? it ?sets up a situation (sort of) for a story, but fails to clearly?indicate where the story is going.?
What is eBabe’s objective goal? ?Who opposes her externally (antagonist) and? what jeopardizes her success internally (character flaw)?? ?What’s at stake? – what does she stand to gain by succeeding, lose by failing?
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