1. Posted: August 11, 2015In:

    An apathetic psychiatrist wakes up with the ability to sense and absorb psychological distress, so when he detects a patient?s toxic marriage, he is compelled to help her escape her abusive husband without revealing his secret.

    Frugal Writer Penpusher

    I like the idea of someone being able to foresee events before they happen and struggling to convince the victim of the upcoming danger. I agree with previous comments.

    I like the idea of someone being able to foresee events before they happen and struggling to convince the victim of the upcoming danger.

    I agree with previous comments.

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  2. Posted: August 12, 2015In:

    In a hole-in-the-wall restaurant, a middle-aged chef with no ambition finds new vigor in his work as he becomes entranced in a whimsical high-school student who aspires to be taken under his wing as an assistant cook.

    There is a lot there but I find it an interesting set up. I don't know how or where you plan to take this story but I offer this 30 word rewrite: When a burnt out cook hires a high school coed her whimsical vigor and raw culinary skills threaten his stale, comfortable life but stirs his passion forRead more

    There is a lot there but I find it an interesting set up. I don’t know how or where you plan to take this story but I offer this 30 word rewrite:
    When a burnt out cook hires a high school coed her whimsical vigor and raw culinary skills threaten his stale, comfortable life but stirs his passion for cooking and life.

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  3. Posted: July 22, 2015In:

    To salvage her disgraced career, an L.A. Chef goes to work for a Kdrama star whose temper is as challenging as the cuisine.

    Frugal Writer Penpusher

    So it seems that the Kdrama celebrity is the antagonist. But the plot is vaguely stated. (happens in over 50% of the posted loglines on this site -- so you are not alone). Maybe try something like the following: have the Kdrama star host an LA exclusive culinary event in which all of the top LA chefRead more

    So it seems that the Kdrama celebrity is the antagonist. But the plot is vaguely stated. (happens in over 50% of the posted loglines on this site — so you are not alone).

    Maybe try something like the following: have the Kdrama star host an LA exclusive culinary event in which all of the top LA chefs will attend (including former employers of the MC). Now the difficult Kdrama celebrity, with poor food ideas, is standing between the MC and his/her redemption.

    Or something along those lines.

    Hope: MC wins acclaim and redeems career,
    vs.
    Fear: following the bimbo celebrity’s bad food ideas will result in culinary humiliation and flopdom in LA.

    Kick-it up a notch: Food Network will televise the event so flopdom extends to the entire country!

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