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To salvage her disgraced career, an L.A. Chef goes to work for a Kdrama star whose temper is as challenging as the cuisine.
So it seems that the Kdrama celebrity is the antagonist. But the plot is vaguely stated. (happens in over 50% of the posted loglines on this site -- so you are not alone). Maybe try something like the following: have the Kdrama star host an LA exclusive culinary event in which all of the top LA chefRead more
So it seems that the Kdrama celebrity is the antagonist. But the plot is vaguely stated. (happens in over 50% of the posted loglines on this site — so you are not alone).
Maybe try something like the following: have the Kdrama star host an LA exclusive culinary event in which all of the top LA chefs will attend (including former employers of the MC). Now the difficult Kdrama celebrity, with poor food ideas, is standing between the MC and his/her redemption.
Or something along those lines.
Hope: MC wins acclaim and redeems career,
vs.
Fear: following the bimbo celebrity’s bad food ideas will result in culinary humiliation and flopdom in LA.
Kick-it up a notch: Food Network will televise the event so flopdom extends to the entire country!
See lessAfter a homeless young man, who thinks he brings a misfortune whenever he is, meets his idol and becomes a member of a group with super-powered people, called Core-holders, he starts thinking that this is turnaround in his life. Its awesome, its everything he ever wanted and? Core-holders start mysteriously dying. Of course.
>>there is no short way to describe what Core-holders are That's a potentially fatal problem with your concept. Core-holders are central to your story. Anyone who reads your logline needs to be able to understand what differentiates them from the crowd of other characters in other films with ultra oRead more
>>there is no short way to describe what Core-holders are
That’s a potentially fatal problem with your concept. Core-holders are central to your story. Anyone who reads your logline needs to be able to understand what differentiates them from the crowd of other characters in other films with ultra or super powers.
Since I, for one, have no clear idea what they are either, I am at a loss as to what to suggest. Other than, first and foremost, come up with a sharply focused and succinct definition of what a Core-holder is/does.
See lessIn the claustrophobia of a haunted flat, an immature voodoo sorcerer makes a terrible choice when he calls upon his dark gods to seek revenge for a broken heart.
You are hiding the ball by describing your second act as a "terrible choice". This vague description encompasses the main plot and your entire second act, one half of the story (one hour for a movie). "Gee Bob, let's go see a movie tonight. How about a cool movie where the sorcerer makes a terribleRead more
You are hiding the ball by describing your second act as a “terrible choice”. This vague description encompasses the main plot and your entire second act, one half of the story (one hour for a movie).
“Gee Bob, let’s go see a movie tonight. How about a cool movie where the sorcerer makes a terrible choice.”
Please give us more than a vague reference to your main conflict.
Loglines are a great tool to keep you focused on the big picture. What you described is a vague idea.
If you know what you are writing, state it.
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