1. Posted: August 5, 2015In:

    When a former priest on death row breaks out of prison, all he wants is a fresh start, but his serial-killer split personality only makes it harder for him to evade the FBI? and the lethal injection.

    dpg Singularity

    If the defining characteristic and flaw of the protagonist is a split personality, then that flaw has to be the major plot driver, the major source of dramatic tension. What's the dramatic tension in wanting to buy a house and how does that relate to his flaw?

    If the defining characteristic and flaw of the protagonist is a split personality, then that flaw has to be the major plot driver, the major source of dramatic tension. What’s the dramatic tension in wanting to buy a house and how does that relate to his flaw?

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  2. Posted: August 7, 2015In:

    Super star Organized Crime Prosecutor Alan Bell is exposed to toxic chemicals and forced to live near death, in a bubble for eight agonizing years. Upon emerging from his self imposed prison, Alan has acquired a ?sixth sense?, which he uses to take down over two hundred corporate polluters, finally avenging his exposure to lethal elements that had placed him on deaths doorstep.

    mrliteral Samurai

    A crusading prosecutor exposed to toxic waste gains the power of telepathy, and uses it to take down the mafia bosses who tried to kill him.

    A crusading prosecutor exposed to toxic waste gains the power of telepathy, and uses it to take down the mafia bosses who tried to kill him.

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  3. Posted: August 7, 2015In:

    ?Hands of Stone? Boxer turned attorney, Maxx Cohen, takes off the gloves fighting an uphill battle with ruthless federal prosecutors while bobbing and weaving his way through representing the New York Mafia.

    mrliteral Samurai

    Hold off on the cutesy boxing lingo in a logline; just make it clear what the story's about.

    Hold off on the cutesy boxing lingo in a logline; just make it clear what the story’s about.

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