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Twelve students at a small town college develop insomnia the same night, each falling asleep only when they face their darkest demons
This is a fascinating premise! I would reveal which of the twelve students is your MC and use an adjective to describe what sets them apart. Does this primarily take place on the same night, or do the twelve students find out they simultaneously developed insomnia and team up to find out why? I'm cuRead more
This is a fascinating premise! I would reveal which of the twelve students is your MC and use an adjective to describe what sets them apart. Does this primarily take place on the same night, or do the twelve students find out they simultaneously developed insomnia and team up to find out why? I’m curious what genre this falls under. It seems like a surrealist drama/horror. How far along are you with this concept? I love the premise and want to co-write it with you if possible.
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"Useless" seems harsh and an exaggeration. I would consider a different adjective. I don't find this logline enticing. Maybe on your next attempt, be more specific. What separates your spy/comedy (I'm assuming) from others? You don't need to specify the country this is set in. "Assigned the task" isRead more
“Useless” seems harsh and an exaggeration. I would consider a different adjective. I don’t find this logline enticing. Maybe on your next attempt, be more specific. What separates your spy/comedy (I’m assuming) from others? You don’t need to specify the country this is set in. “Assigned the task” is redundant. Instead, put: assigned to go undercover, or simply, go undercover.
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Hi Sam. The Logline sounds a bit vague to me. I would like to get a better idea is to who the protagonist is apart form just being a teenager and where the main conflict specifically comes from other than facing his past. Reads more like a movie tagline than a logline. From what logline it doesn't vRead more
Hi Sam. The Logline sounds a bit vague to me. I would like to get a better idea is to who the protagonist is apart form just being a teenager and where the main conflict specifically comes from other than facing his past. Reads more like a movie tagline than a logline. From what logline it doesn’t very much sound like it’s something we haven’t seen dozens of times before, so an original twist on it could really go a long way here I think.
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