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When his family is ripped apart by a sociopathic outlaw, a resented young man must face his past to save their lives
His family ripped apart by a sociopathic outlaw is external. Facing his past is internal. You should give us the external action the lead character must take to defeat the sociopathic outlaw in the logline. (While keeping the internal growth of the lead character in the story but not in the logline)Read more
His family ripped apart by a sociopathic outlaw is external.
Facing his past is internal.
You should give us the external action the lead character must take to defeat the sociopathic outlaw in the logline. (While keeping the internal growth of the lead character in the story but not in the logline)
All that being said, the logline has a gripping beginning; ‘ripped apart’ is very descriptive, same with the term ‘sociopathic outlaw,’ definitely keep everything up to the first coma.
See lessWhen a teenage leader of a small anti-authority vandalism group gets caught by police, he must dodge the officers and steal one of their cars to get away.
Usually, if there is a 'must' there must be an 'or else,' or else the must won't seem to have stakes. For example, "...or else face the wrath of his father, who happens to be the police chief." --- "When he's caught by the police, the teen leader of a small anti-authority group must escape their cluRead more
Usually, if there is a ‘must’ there must be an ‘or else,’ or else the must won’t seem to have stakes.
For example, “…or else face the wrath of his father, who happens to be the police chief.”
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“When he’s caught by the police, the teen leader of a small anti-authority group must escape their clutches or face the wrath of his father, who happens to be the chief of police.”
When a cursed goddess is invited to partake in speed dating, she must try to find a lover who can withstand her curse, and her temper.
A solid logline. If you can describe the curse in a word or two you might want to add it to the logline, but don't add it if describing the curse would take an entire sentence.
A solid logline.
If you can describe the curse in a word or two you might want to add it to the logline, but don’t add it if describing the curse would take an entire sentence.
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