Penpusher
Posted: 2014-12-13T01:34:30+10:00 In:

A 13 year old little brother had grown up around the lives of crooked cops, gangsters,corrupted politicians, a broken family, and a brother who is hated by them all. Will the little fella help his brother, abandon him, or do absolutely nothing?

The Escape from Hell

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    1. Singularity

      ?…Will the little fella help his brother, abandon him, or do absolutely nothing?”
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      Help his brother with what? Be more likable to the family?

      What is the lead character’s goal?

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    2. Singularity

      ?…Will the little fella help his brother, abandon him, or do absolutely nothing?”
      —–

      Help his brother with what? Be more likable to the family?

      What is the lead character’s goal?

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    3. How about this?

      “A teenage boy who grew up in a family of criminals and corrupt politicians struggles to choose between the only life he knows and coming to the aid of his beloved older brother, a man totally opposed to the family?s values.”

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    4. How about this?

      “A teenage boy who grew up in a family of criminals and corrupt politicians struggles to choose between the only life he knows and coming to the aid of his beloved older brother, a man totally opposed to the family?s values.”

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    5. Singularity

      And who in the cast of the crooked and corrupt is the designated antagonist, the primary opponent who stands in the way of his goal?

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    6. Singularity

      And who in the cast of the crooked and corrupt is the designated antagonist, the primary opponent who stands in the way of his goal?

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    7. As said above, the main problem with this logline is that we have absolutely no sense of what the protagonist’s goal is. Also with the last part I feel it would be more effective if it was just an ultimatum. Will he come to his brothers aid or abandon him? The bit about doing absolutely nothing sounds uninteresting. It isn’t the best way to end your logline. You want to leave with a punch.

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    8. As said above, the main problem with this logline is that we have absolutely no sense of what the protagonist’s goal is. Also with the last part I feel it would be more effective if it was just an ultimatum. Will he come to his brothers aid or abandon him? The bit about doing absolutely nothing sounds uninteresting. It isn’t the best way to end your logline. You want to leave with a punch.

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