Singularity
Posted: 2012-09-16T19:19:52+10:00

A battle of wills ensues between a preacher and a criminal leader after a gang botches a robbery, escapes into the church and holds the congregation hostage.

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    1. Logliner

      Sounds like First Sunday, but deeper.

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    2. Penpusher

      It is clear there are bad guy (criminal) ?and good guy (preacher). However what is somehow down on the track? the preacher fights for everyone under his charge from a guilt…. The pitcher surprisingly??becomes ?a criminal from the past. Who is bad now??What a twist.

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    3. Singularity

      I think it is called “paying Homage'” not stealing, hehe. I will check out Key Largo, just put it in my queue.

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    4. Idea sounds good. Make sure you work in the part about the Bad guy telling the truth into the log line. And watch Key Largo if you pursue this idea further, you may even want to steal it’s structure a little bit.

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    5. Singularity

      That is an interesting Idea Filmstar, I was defiantly going in a different direction.

      Growing up I did go to many different churches, there is always drama. Maybe the bad guy could, “Tell the truth” sort of like spike in season four of Buffy. Disrupting but also solving some of the problems between church goers.

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    6. Singularity

      That is a good point Nicholas, The battle of wills I had in mind was, The criminal leader is someone who is very angry at God. The last place he wants to be is stuck in a church. The preacher just wants the congregation to make it out alive.

      I am thinking the leader may have even committed the robbery for a good reason. A relative that needs an operation. A company that screwed over it’s employees But he doesn’t want to go to jail, is desperate and not happy being stuck in a church.

      I am not sure how to say all that in one line though.

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    7. Samurai

      My criticism of the logline is levelled at “A battle of wills …” This appears too vague. Just about every conflict between a protag and antag (even if neither is the outright “good guy” and outright “bad guy”) could be described as a battle of wills. Die Hard is a battle of wills. The Devil Wears Prada is a battle of wills. The Great Outdoors is a battle of wills. So it’s kind of just fluff language. In any case, it’s implied by the set up. A preacher must protect his congregation. A criminal is using the congregation to ensure his escape with the loot.

      So I think you’ve got all the pieces here for a classic logline, but you should bring the protagonist into sharper relief – give us their flaw, or the irony that’s going to hook us into the picture. The conflict is otherwise clear, the stakes are nice and high (both are fighting for survival – the crim only for themselves, the preacher for everyone under his charge).

      In any case, I think it sounds like a great one-location film. Wish I had thought of it 🙂
      Nice title too.

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    8. Penpusher

      Yeh I would go with the Crim as the protag – take the road less travelled…seen the Town ?

      Crim who has the stash from the bank job but while he’s at church hears about all the problems and projects the church is helping around the room and starts giving cash away…until… it’s all gone – under great conflict from his enemies. Like it !

      Can I write it ??? 🙂

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    9. Singularity

      The Preacher but I am not sure I should portray the criminal leader as the ‘Bad guy’ either, just different sets of goals.

      Basically I am looking for a single location script Idea that could be made for a low or even micro budget.

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    10. Penpusher

      This is good, man. Who’s the hero ? The priest or the crim ?

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