A devoted wife suspecting infidelity poisons her children to hurt her husband and now she must right her wrong and conceal the truth when she later realizes her mistake.

Thanks jjb, I’ve taken some hints from your suggestion and actually come out with something different and hopefully better. at least i know now the concept of the story is realistic and that’s a starting point for me. I learned today that the standard for a log-line is 25 words,sounds impossible when you have a lot of descriptions to give.

Timmyelliot, thanks for clearing my doubts, now i am confident i have a different story altogether.

Actually the story line talks about the woman giving little doses of arsenic which actually causes slow death, since the victims will get sick gradually. I intend to make correction on her part, a situation where she starts asking around for expert help when she finally realizes her mistake and in the process still tries to conceal the fact that she is responsible. Jeez i don’t know if this is believable! Then the word devoted, some say it will sound better if it’s “obsessed” or “deranged” or whatever. I feel like leaving it as devoted.

Timmyelliot, i think Medea Miracle is actually similar to my story in many ways. Did she poison the kids after her madness or what? I could just change my plot. I don’t want something that similar, i want a unique story.

Finally… i’m gradually getting there…

Thanks for the link timmyelliot, i’ll surely check it out and bryson, i remember you said earlier on, you can’t truly please everybody, lol, you can start from explaining the “element of believability” that’s missing. I’ll probably be able to “find it” and if you can’t i guess then i’m getting close to perfection. The revision is actually a suggestion from someone, just want to see how it’ll work. Thanks for reading the post all the same.