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Posted: August 2, 20142014-08-02T20:32:20+10:00 2014-08-02T20:32:20+10:00In: Public

A group of city guys must transform and go undercover to hunt down the murderer of their transgender friend.

Transgenders

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    1. dpg Singularity
      2014-08-04T02:03:17+10:00Added an answer on August 4, 2014 at 2:03 am

      I’m still unclear to me about what constitutes the hook of the story. Does it mean what I think it means, surgery, taking hormone, etc., or…?

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    2. dpg Singularity
      2014-08-04T02:03:17+10:00Added an answer on August 4, 2014 at 2:03 am

      I’m still unclear to me about what constitutes the hook of the story. Does it mean what I think it means, surgery, taking hormone, etc., or…?

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    3. ade
      2014-08-04T01:03:02+10:00Added an answer on August 4, 2014 at 1:03 am

      Thanks Abby and I sincerely apologise if I have offended you or anyone with my phrasing. If you refer to the title, this I know is grammatically incorrect but an intentional artistic choice to try to convey the similarity with the title Transformers. The ‘transform’ in the logline but also in the movie has many meanings with reference to ‘transition’ and ‘transform’ and character development. Hopefully portraying both Transgender and Transformer references. I really appreciate your feedback. Sorry again. Ade

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    4. ade
      2014-08-04T01:03:02+10:00Added an answer on August 4, 2014 at 1:03 am

      Thanks Abby and I sincerely apologise if I have offended you or anyone with my phrasing. If you refer to the title, this I know is grammatically incorrect but an intentional artistic choice to try to convey the similarity with the title Transformers. The ‘transform’ in the logline but also in the movie has many meanings with reference to ‘transition’ and ‘transform’ and character development. Hopefully portraying both Transgender and Transformer references. I really appreciate your feedback. Sorry again. Ade

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    5. AbbyAline
      2014-08-03T17:07:02+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2014 at 5:07 pm

      I think the logline itself is fine, but I believe ‘transgendered’ is appropriate for this phrasing. It sounds unnatural to me as a gay lady to leave out the ‘d’.

      I think you may want to tip your hand a little more in regards to the ‘transform’ part, but since I don’t know what is behind door number one it’s hard to say.

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    6. AbbyAline
      2014-08-03T17:07:02+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2014 at 5:07 pm

      I think the logline itself is fine, but I believe ‘transgendered’ is appropriate for this phrasing. It sounds unnatural to me as a gay lady to leave out the ‘d’.

      I think you may want to tip your hand a little more in regards to the ‘transform’ part, but since I don’t know what is behind door number one it’s hard to say.

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    7. ade
      2014-08-03T16:39:28+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2014 at 4:39 pm

      Thanks Richiev. It is a comedy, action adventure, the guys have a failed attempt at dressing up but the ‘transform’ indicates they have to try something else. Think Transformers meets White Chicks.

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    8. ade
      2014-08-03T16:39:28+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2014 at 4:39 pm

      Thanks Richiev. It is a comedy, action adventure, the guys have a failed attempt at dressing up but the ‘transform’ indicates they have to try something else. Think Transformers meets White Chicks.

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    9. Richiev Singularity
      2014-08-03T02:48:12+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2014 at 2:48 am

      This attempt is better. This logline is beginning to show us the ‘hook’

      Just curious, are the guys going to go through with the surgery or are they just going to dress up as women to investigate the murder?

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    10. Richiev Singularity
      2014-08-03T02:48:12+10:00Added an answer on August 3, 2014 at 2:48 am

      This attempt is better. This logline is beginning to show us the ‘hook’

      Just curious, are the guys going to go through with the surgery or are they just going to dress up as women to investigate the murder?

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