A group of sister have a lengthy conversation trying to fill in the social, cultural and physiological blanks about a long extinct species: Humans.
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A group of sister have a lengthy conversation trying to fill in the social, cultural and physiological blanks about a long extinct species: Humans.
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It?s good to have intrigue but not confusion. If they are not human they are?
Plus a conversation isn?t much of a story. What happens during the conversation? This is conversation fully of subtext about their relationship?
I don?t see enough here to know what your story truly is and what it is about.
This next sentence may seems a bit hard.
But your logline should show us how clever your story is, not how clever you are. Your logline is a witty little sentence with a sting in the tale. Shows you can write, but I am blind to the real story.
Where is the conflict?
Who is the lead character?
What is their goal?
What is standing in their way?
A group of sisters have a lengthy conversations as they attempt to learn the social, cultural and physiological processes of a mostly unknown and extinct species: Human.
Here’s my take, but I’m a newbie…
Sounds like a short movie, or a theater piece… Use the plural in sisters… How many sisters?
Is this a post-human species or just a group of aliens? Are they organic beings?
What is their interest in humans? Are they scientists or is this just a casual conversation?
What kind of society are we talking about?
Do they have contrasting opinions about humans? You need conflict…
If it is a comedy you should present something that indicates the genre in your logline.
The logline lacks a plot.
And if the sisters aren’t human? then what are they?