SOMETIMES LOVE
A once academically gifted young man is intent on getting his life back on track. One night while driving home, he?s nearly killed in an accident and falls for the woman who saves him, but her lies and past horror may destroy everything.
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Do we need the first sentence?
Giving the story away is exactly the purpose of a logline — not the ending, but the story.
Hey hey, I noticed, in the first sentence you give the lead a goal, (Getting his life back on track) then your second sentence doesn’t relate to that goal at all. The logline seems disjointed as a result.
There are some good elements here and with a little twerking (OK tweaking but that’s not as fun 🙂 you could end up with a solid logline
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
How does he intend to get his “life back on track”? Which is to say, what is his objective goal? What’s at stake?
Thank you for the feedback, I’ll continue to work on it. However, those questions are important, but that would be giving away the story in my opinion, but I’m still learning.
What happened to him? Why does he need to get his life back on track? How does she play a part in him getting his life back in order? Why would her past(unless it connects with her present/future) destroy everything?
I like the logline. I’m sure you’ve already thought of the answers to all my questions but could perhaps be a little clearer in your logline?
Good luck