Penpusher
Posted: 2013-09-27T10:05:25+10:00 In:

A research scientist races against time to stop two earth-altering events: the rapid deterioration of planet Earth?s gravitational field and her family from completely drifting apart.

Losing Gravity

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    1. Samurai

      I like how you compare the family drifting apart to the loss of earth’s gravitational field – but I would be more inclined to mention it as a complication, rather than a second story.

      For example: A research scientist races against time to halt the rapid deterioration of earth’s gravitational field while struggling to stop her family from drifting apart.

      Still not sure if the family story belongs in the logline. Without it, the story is very bland, but the irony should arise from the research scientist themselves. What makes them different?

      Also, how the hell is the gravitational field disappearing. You know that defies the laws of physics right? Whatever is causing that to happen should be the hook of the story. And the irony should be that the research scientist either caused it or is the wrong person to deal with the problem.

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    2. Penpusher

      I was going for it as ironic logline ending. A family break-up is not going to cause a planet-wide disaster, but it’s certainly a big deal for the family!

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    3. Singularity

      Because one of your problems is the potential death of all life on the planet, and the other problem could be fix by demanding to her family, “one night a week we eat a meal together together,” it’s hard to take the second problem seriously.

      As a result, the problem of ‘her family drifting apart’ feels more like a B story and as such, even though I can see the correlation between that problem and the title “Gravity” I don’t think it should be in the logline.

      Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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