A self confident hitman relives along a nightmarish night the killing of his last victim.
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A self confident hitman relives along a nightmarish night the killing of his last victim.
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Story is conflict, and conflict from a story standpoint is what is standing between the lead character accomplishing his or her goal. Since your logline doesn’t tell us what the lead character’s goal is, we, the reader, do not know what the conflict is, which means we do not know what the story is about.
Lead character: Self-confident hitman
Goal: No idea
Conflict: Since I don’t know what the leads goal is, I don’t know what is standing in the way of the lead achieving his goal.
Goal and Conflict are important parts of a logline and you should consider adding it to your logline in order to draw in the reader.
Hello FFF,
I thought that ?-“reality” – ?would means something more subjective than –?reality – mostly if placed after – nightmarish?- . However, ?”reality” is not in the logline.
I don’t understand ?why you “don?t understand what you mean by ?relives?“, as you give the best definition of this:??To undergo or experience again, especially in the imagination?. I thought this were clear enough.
Who’s the antagonist? maybe himself, maybe the story (“the plot is a conspiracy against the hero”), maybe something else…
Hello,
I don’t understand what you mean by “relives”.
“To undergo or experience again, especially in the imagination”.
I can’t imagine what the movie will be about… twice the same killing in the same way? In the reality?
I’m confused. Or are you trying to say that the movie starts with the man who have killed his victim and ‘remember’ all he did? If this is the case you should build the logline telling what happened instead of explaining the design principle of the movie.
Anyway, even the ‘story driven’ movies have well defined characters, goals, antagonists.
I heard good things about “schneider vs bax” where a “easy” contract becomes tragically(comically) “hard”.
“On his birthday, a hitman reluctantly takes on the easy task of killing a writer, only to find the job a lot more difficult than expected”. (from imdb – this is a teasing logline not a perfect working logline)
Hello, I think you just have an initial situation – you should focus on the main action of the movie.
“When his last victim appears to him in a nightmare,?a self confident hitman must…” ?then what happens ?
Who is the antagonist? What is his goal? Why is he reliving his last kill?