Feature Film “Unearthly” Logline Review
After a mysterious new classmate places a curse on them, two teenage boys are forced to take action and unlock insidious secrets about their quaint Southern town and master their newly found gifts.
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Hello,
I like the setting and the idea,
as a ligline you should avoid words like “mysterious”,”forced to take action”,”unlock insidious secrets”, “master the new found gifts”. This is very unspecific, vague. This doesn’t build curiosity, it stress uncertainity about what we will see in the movie. Focus about images and real actions and you’ll write a good logline.
You should tell us what the curse is since the entire story revolves around it.
Why must they master these gifts? And if they’ve received gifts, where does the curse come in?
This logline lacks clarity and doesn’t specify a plot.
Why are there two main characters? Is there a need for dual a protagonist plot?
What is their goal? What are their character flaws?
Hope this helps.