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ath579
Posted: January 5, 20142014-01-05T12:25:32+10:00 2014-01-05T12:25:32+10:00In: Public

After defrauding his friends and family and subsequently faking his own suicide, Harvey returns years later to find a last-minute match for a kidney transplant he desperately needs to stay alive.

(Title suggestions welcome!)

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    1. ath579
      2014-01-08T19:09:29+10:00Added an answer on January 8, 2014 at 7:09 pm

      Thanks for the logline tweak!

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2014-01-06T11:55:30+10:00Added an answer on January 6, 2014 at 11:55 am

      I love the built in conflict. not only will those he defrauded be angry with him but he will see first hand how his selfish actions affected those he swindled.

      Great concept.

      (btw DPG’s re-write is on the money)

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    3. dpg Singularity
      2014-01-06T01:28:55+10:00Added an answer on January 6, 2014 at 1:28 am

      LOL! That would be great title if the organ in need wasn’t a kidney.

      As far the logline itself, it’s got all the ingredients: a protagonist with a character flaw and urgent goal. The antagonists are implied: all the people he exploited and deceived. The stakes are life and death.

      My only tweak would be to tighten up the logline and eliminate the the character’s name (it’s not required). Thus:

      Years after defrauding his friends and family and faking his suicide, a man returns to find a match for a kidney transplant he desperately needs to stay alive.

      A minor quibble. This is a story I want to see on the silver screen. Best wishes making it happen, ath579!

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    4. Richiev Singularity
      2014-01-05T15:57:23+10:00Added an answer on January 5, 2014 at 3:57 pm

      Liver let die…

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