“MR. GOMBRO”
WilliamPenpusher
At the threshold of death, an obscure, nonconformist, bisexual writer settles down with a female student on the French Riviera to fight the last merciless battle for his life and global recognition.
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Is this biography based on a real or known fictitious character? If so, the logline can be rearranged with this as the intro to orientate the reader.
Thanks.
Based on a real character – a little-known writer,
You need to present your logline in purely dramatic terms.
Thanks. Meanwhile, I produced V2 (a version # 2) as follows:
In France, an extremely gifted, aging, and seriously ill writer, supported by a female student, starts his last desperate battle against the critics and his best friend to achieve the global recognition.
Further, my suggested logline concerning Yacuza for you:
A young Londoner apprentice in English/European martial arts…uses all his combat arsenal to…
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From who’s point of view is this story told?
Hi, thanks for your question.
From a protagonist’s point of view, that is the writer’s POV.
Meanwhile, I produced the other logline. Could you possibly select a better one
and comment it? – Thanks for your time.
In France, an extremely gifted, aging, and seriously ill writer, supported by a female student, starts his last desperate battle against the critics and his best friend to achieve the global recognition.
Okay, I asked the question for a reason… and I thank you for the answer.
The reason was, we know nothing about the writer at the beginning of the story. So having the story from the perspective of the student would actually give the audience their point of view. We would learn about the aging artist as the student does.
However, as for your second logline, I think it is better, however, you need to give us a ‘face’ to global recognition… such as being on the cover of ‘time magazine’ or winning a Pulitzer Prize. What does global recognition look like to the lead character? How do we know what success looks like? How do we know when the character succeeds? (Or fails)
Thanks.
My protagonist is a real character who received a Formentor Prix (the second literary prize after the Nobel at that time) in 1967. His work was translated into 30 languages.