Tas Mania
Determined to experience the wildest paradise on the island of Tasmania, one will do anything to find a way.
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Thank you so much guys! Will fix that up!
What can i add to these comments? All true. Also, I don’t have a sense if this is an action, rom com, or a spiritual awakening, or what. I mean it could be a nature paradise, spiritual paradise. What are we talking about when we say paradise? And why does it have to be Tassie? Is it some unique feature of the island? Flora, fauna, people? It sounds potentially very interesting, but it’s not a logline at the moment. Good luck with the revision.
Hi Isabelle, thank you for joining the party!
Have a quick read of the logline-writing guidelines on this site. It will help you come up with a good basic structure for your story logline.
Happy writing!
This logline starts off well. “Determined to experience the wildest paradise on the island of Tasmania, ”
Then it falls apart, “one will do anything to find a way”
‘One’ what? If it’s a person you should tell us who. “A mild Banker” “A determined thrill seeker” “A former Navy Seal”
What ‘way’? Not sure what you mean when you say ‘find a way.’
Who or what is keeping the protagonist from their goal. Is it nature? is it money?
How will the protagonist attempt to overcome what’s standing in the way. Will he/she, Rob a bank? Convince a reluctant native guide to show them a secret path? Steal his step fathers plane?
I like the idea, now if you would tell us who the lead is, what’s standing in their way and how they will attempt to over come the obstacle, you will have a much better logline on your hands.