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Jason Kesse
Posted: January 4, 20152015-01-04T14:12:51+10:00 2015-01-04T14:12:51+10:00In: Public

A teenaged girl is thrown into a heaping mess with the gathering forces of evil, an axe weilding ghost maniac, and the task of hiding her darkest secret as cursed witch.

Drama Mini-Series: “UNEARTHLY”

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    1. Kimmy Gorden
      2015-01-06T13:53:39+10:00Added an answer on January 6, 2015 at 1:53 pm

      Agreed with the others here as a goal is not really- clear.
      But just going on what you wrote and how I would do it-

      “A closeted teen-aged witch tries to keep her secret and save the world when a tide of ghastly evils threatens the planet.”

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    2. Kimmy Gorden
      2015-01-06T13:53:39+10:00Added an answer on January 6, 2015 at 1:53 pm

      Agreed with the others here as a goal is not really- clear.
      But just going on what you wrote and how I would do it-

      “A closeted teen-aged witch tries to keep her secret and save the world when a tide of ghastly evils threatens the planet.”

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    3. dpg Singularity
      2015-01-04T22:57:47+10:00Added an answer on January 4, 2015 at 10:57 pm

      As Richiev said, she doesn’t have a goal, at least a positive one. “Task of of hiding her darkest secret” is negative, reactionary and passive. What is so interesting about watching a character hiding, suppressing her defining characteristic, the source of canny powers and abilities? You can’t build a mini-series, let alone one episode, around a negative, or passive goal. The story should always be driven by a main character with a positive goal.

      Maybe she’s a witch and a cursed one. But the plot is a conspiracy against the main characters original intention; it must compel her to be proactive, to use her ‘bewitching powers” for some positive objective goal.

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    4. dpg Singularity
      2015-01-04T22:57:47+10:00Added an answer on January 4, 2015 at 10:57 pm

      As Richiev said, she doesn’t have a goal, at least a positive one. “Task of of hiding her darkest secret” is negative, reactionary and passive. What is so interesting about watching a character hiding, suppressing her defining characteristic, the source of canny powers and abilities? You can’t build a mini-series, let alone one episode, around a negative, or passive goal. The story should always be driven by a main character with a positive goal.

      Maybe she’s a witch and a cursed one. But the plot is a conspiracy against the main characters original intention; it must compel her to be proactive, to use her ‘bewitching powers” for some positive objective goal.

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    5. Richiev Singularity
      2015-01-04T15:02:30+10:00Added an answer on January 4, 2015 at 3:02 pm

      You haven’t given your lead character a goal. What does she want? Just curious.

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    6. Richiev Singularity
      2015-01-04T15:02:30+10:00Added an answer on January 4, 2015 at 3:02 pm

      You haven’t given your lead character a goal. What does she want? Just curious.

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