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AO31Logliner
Massacres and mysterious disappearings are occuring in the Kabyle mountain regions of Algeria by a dangerous beast. A professional hunter is engaged by authorities to track down the creature and eliminate it, he will soon realize the task won’t be as simple as his previous achievements.
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I think your log line would sound better as follows –
When an expert hunter discovers a ferocious beast, he risks his reputation if he doesn’t pursue and capture it to save a village at the expense of endangering his team mates.
What do you think?
Richiev’s version is an improvement.
“he’s†Not the protagonist. Best in a logline to state the protagonist upfront.
Best to start…â€When (protagonist). Say what happens/occurs…then what they must do or not do and why…and what will be the result if or if the goal isn’t met.
“When he’s hired to track down a mysterious beast who has been terrorizing the people of the Kabyle mountains, a professional hunter soon finds the tables turned when he and his crew become the hunted.”