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Callum.SPenpusher
Posted: May 9, 20132013-05-09T04:07:00+10:00 2013-05-09T04:07:00+10:00In: Public

Narayanan Krishnan is an award-winning chef in the taj group of hotels but after feeding an old destitute man he quits his job to help the un-cared

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    1. Callum.S Penpusher
      2013-05-17T01:16:19+10:00Added an answer on May 17, 2013 at 1:16 am

      Very broad answer ! Thank you for the advice. I’m probably going to invest in some books, however i’m studying for my GCSE’s At the moment. Hopefully some time next year i can afford some camera equipment and start making some short films, then maybe in a couple of years get to the level of film festivals. Who knows ! Anyway thanks for the response it means alot

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    2. 2013-05-17T01:00:53+10:00Added an answer on May 17, 2013 at 1:00 am

      Very broad indeed ! Aha Thank you for the advice, I’m thinking of buying some camera equipment for some short 6 minute films. Then maybe after 6th form i could enter some film festivals, who knows ! Anyways thanks for the advice ill have to invest in some books, however it’s quite a difficult time as i am studying for GCSE’s aswell :/

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    3. Tony Edward Samurai
      2013-05-16T10:56:23+10:00Added an answer on May 16, 2013 at 10:56 am

      I don’t know if I’m qualified to give you that kind of advice — I’m quite new to this myself — just maybe not as new to life as you…

      If I was able to give advice to my sixteen year old self, it would be this (and given it’s a broad question this will be a broad answer…) :

      Read as many screenplays,and plays (and books) as you can. Critique them. Discover what you like, and what you don’t like, but most importantly, understand why.

      Read as many books as you can on the craft of screenwriting/ writing. There are some good ones out there, and possibly some not so good — take what you will from them, but understand that the only RIGHT way is YOUR way… you’ve got to find that yourself. Blake Snyder’s ‘Save the Cat!’ and Robert McKee’s ‘Story’ are very popular, and that’s probably because they both provide very useful advice. ‘Save the Cat!’, if you haven’t already read it, is great for understanding structure, at least to the ‘Hollywood’ paradigm. Snyder is VERY strict on hitting certain beats on certain pages, McKee on the other hand is completely against this notion, suggesting that there needs to be a minimum of three major reversals in a screenplay…. where you put them is up to you…

      There’s a bunch of interviews with screenwriters on the web, always worth a watch…. some recurring themes I’ve found in these interviews: 1. No one knows what’s going to work. 2. Kill your darlings (they’re the parts of your screenplay that you might think are really cool but don’t actually add anything to your story — not your friends and family;)) 3. Write as often as you can — and like an exercise program to get fit, getting into a regular routine will probably be very beneficial… and THINKING about writing is not actually writing. 4. Write what you care about… not necessarily what you know… of course you need to know your subject, but if you don’t really care about it then no one else will.

      You sound like you’re on the right path — finishing school is definitely a good way to go. In terms of going to film school, I couldn’t advise either way — I’ve only done theater/ performance courses post High School, but met a few great writers there which lead me to want to write. I think one of the major benefits of film school would be to get the opportunity to meet other writers, Directors, Producers — it’s how a lot of the greats got a foot in the door down the track…

      Anyway, I’ve waffled enough, and have to stop procrastinating over working on my own screenplay. I hope what I’ve said is of some worth.

      Best of luck.

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    4. Callum.S Penpusher
      2013-05-16T02:59:31+10:00Added an answer on May 16, 2013 at 2:59 am

      Thank You ! Means alot. Do you have any tips for the future ? aha bit of a broad question but i was wondering if there is anything i could do now to improve my chances 🙂

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    5. 2013-05-16T02:51:42+10:00Added an answer on May 16, 2013 at 2:51 am

      Thank You ! Means alot. I’v already decided to try buy some equipment ( If i can afford it ) And just film anything i can ! I’v always stuck with things i enjoy doing, money isn’t really my focus, loads of my peers want to be lawyers and do business studies but whether they actually ‘Enjoy it’, god knows. I found a quote saying ”What job would you do if money didn’t exist ?”

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    6. Tony Edward Samurai
      2013-05-15T19:04:16+10:00Added an answer on May 15, 2013 at 7:04 pm

      Hi Callum S

      I just wanted to say that for a sixteen year old this is a very mature premise. Yes, the logline needs some tweaking, but you’ve got some great feedback here, so keep chiseling away! Don’t sweat too much on your path — just write, write and then write some more — and above all else… have fun.

      Best of luck.

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    7. 2013-05-15T17:35:46+10:00Added an answer on May 15, 2013 at 5:35 pm

      Ah, very good – you can never start early enough 🙂 Keep having fun with it, all the best!

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    8. Callum.S Penpusher
      2013-05-15T07:57:48+10:00Added an answer on May 15, 2013 at 7:57 am

      Oh ok thanks ! I’m only 16 but i have high hopes, i guess everyone has ! I’m so confused with my path right now, whether to go film school or just do it myself. So i’m just going to do 6th form, join the local drama club again and research, research, research , research ! Hopefully by then i’ll have a clearer view of my path :/ Sounds cheesy but it’s true

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    9. 2013-05-15T07:40:36+10:00Added an answer on May 15, 2013 at 7:40 am

      Thanks, I’m 16 but i’m really serious about giving film making and writing a shot. I’m so confused on a path at the moment. I’v always loved acting and i’m fascinated by screenwriting. I’v been reading blogs about film schools , this that and the other but they all give mixed feed back. So i’m going to do 6th form, invest in camera equipment, join a drama club again, keep writing and hopefully know my path by then ! 🙂 Thanks for the feedback

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    10. 2013-05-14T07:35:23+10:00Added an answer on May 14, 2013 at 7:35 am

      You could try to emphasize the contrast between Narayanan’s “cool” and well paid job, feeding spoiled Gourmet people in pretty places and his new mission of giving a healthy meal to as many poor people as possible.

      Try to sharpen the inciting incident a little more and suggest that this new awareness and mission slowly but surely takes him on a road to a completely new life for himself and his family.

      Heard of this guy, it is an amazing story, well worth giving it a movie-thought! Good luck.

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    11. Richiev Singularity
      2013-05-12T11:20:30+10:00Added an answer on May 12, 2013 at 11:20 am

      Cool, I love movies based on true stories. Hope it works out.

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    12. Callum.S Penpusher
      2013-05-11T00:57:57+10:00Added an answer on May 11, 2013 at 12:57 am

      This is based on a true story, so i’d have to research it more. Thanks for the feedback ! 🙂

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    13. 2013-05-09T12:06:11+10:00Added an answer on May 9, 2013 at 12:06 pm

      The protagonist’s name and where he works should not be included in the logline. Those are for the slightly longer “premise”.

      “An award-winning Indian chef quits his job at a 5-star hotel to help care for the homeless, and…” then what? Your logline is only telling me the very beginning of the story. Something else must happen. “… and builds a gourmet soup kitchen.” Something like that.

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    14. Richiev Singularity
      2013-05-09T09:49:06+10:00Added an answer on May 9, 2013 at 9:49 am

      You forgot to add “The End” at the end of the logline.

      Narayanan Krishnan is an award-winning chef in the taj group of hotels but after feeding an old destitute man he quits his job to help the un-cared:The End

      -OR-

      You could add some conflict, let us know what is standing in the way of his goal.

      Hope that helped, looks like an interesting set up, good luck with this.

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