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Posted: January 27, 20132013-01-27T11:52:55+10:00 2013-01-27T11:52:55+10:00In: Public

On the day of the NFL Draft, Bills General Manager Sonny Weaver has the opportunity to save football in Buffalo when he trades for the number one pick. He must quickly decide what he?s willing to sacrifice in pursuit of perfection as the lines between his personal and professional life become blurred.

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    1. Richiev Singularity
      2013-01-27T14:59:44+10:00Added an answer on January 27, 2013 at 2:59 pm

      A movie about the NLF Draft would be great, Not only show the war room but the number one prospect at his home hoping he will be picked first.

      The logline however needs work: Too long, try cutting it down a bit to get to the meet of the story.

      Great idea, not a typical sports movie.

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    2. Richiev Singularity
      2013-01-27T15:00:35+10:00Added an answer on January 27, 2013 at 3:00 pm

      Sorry, I meant meat not meet.

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    3. 2013-01-29T16:50:45+10:00Added an answer on January 29, 2013 at 4:50 pm

      The logline is clunky but the set up seems quite different from the norm for a football movie. So methinks there is potential here. The protagonist, however, is hard to sympathise with as stated – since he seems to be on the cold side. But this point can be easily fixed by emphasising his desire to resuscitate his low profile town. In addition, one positive thing about the protagonist is that he does not seem to be the straightforward former-player-macho-bonehead stereotype.

      So here’s a logline suggestion: “To resurrect the flagging fortunes of his beloved home town, Sonny daringly drives his football club to buy up the number one pick of the NFL Draft. But the pick is hotly contested property and the cost on Sonny’s personal life will be high.”

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    4. 2013-01-29T17:53:12+10:00Added an answer on January 29, 2013 at 5:53 pm

      Sorry, I meant to sign off as “Steven Fernandez (Judge)” up there.

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    5. steveylang Samurai
      2013-02-02T07:14:05+10:00Added an answer on February 2, 2013 at 7:14 am

      The actual plot conflict is only vaguely described here. What does he have to sacrifice and why? What is being blurred and why? It’s not at all obvious why having a first round draft pick would cause all these problems, you have to tell us.

      It’s a very intriguing start (makes me think of Moneyball) but I have no idea what actually happens in the movie.

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