stumped for a title, suggestions welcomed…
On the verge of striking it rich an intergalactic diamond huntress is summoned to earth for compulsory breeding, but she is kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route and must fight for her freedom to make it home before she is sentenced to death.
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You have presented two inciting incidents, That is why your logline is a little long.
1) being summoned to earth
2) being kidnapped.
I think I would go with kidnapped.
Why is she being sentenced to death?
I think cleaning this logline up would help greatly. Something like “An intergalactic diamond huntress kidnapped by a ruthless space pirate en-route to Earth, must fight for her freedom in order to make it home before she is sentenced to death.”
It’s not perfect, but is punchier, in my opinion.
“Breed or Die”
In order to make her goal clearer – what exactly is ‘home’? Where, if she was kidnapped simply ‘en-route’ to Earth, will she be safe from the kidnappers? Sounds like an exciting story otherwise, good work!