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Posted: 2018-06-02T07:03:07+10:00 In:

Reality is scarier than fiction for a ten-year-old gay kid in small town Indiana in 1982. Based on actual events, one boy?s journey of self-discovery comes to a halt when he hears about a gay cancer that is merely foreshadowing the ignorance, fear, hate and religion that almost ends his life and forever changes his world.

Reality is scarier than fiction for a ten-year-old gay kid in small town Indiana in 1982. Based on actual events, one boy?s journey of self-discovery comes to a halt when he hears about a gay cancer that is merely foreshadowing the ignorance, fear, hate and religion that almost ends his life and forever changes his world.
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    1. Singularity

      You should write the logline from the point of view of the lead character, not a narrator.
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      “When he hears about gay cancer, a small town, ten-year-old?must…” (I am not sure what the lead character’s goal is so it is hard to move forward)

      What is the lead character’s pro-active goal
      What is standing in the way (Is there a specific bully, for instance?)

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    2. Uberwriter

      It’s certainly a plus if yours is based on actual events. However, you must be specific about the detail that encompass his conflict. How does it go from “his journey of self-discovery coming to a halt..” to “..almost ending his life”?
      “when he hears about gay cancer..” is your Inciting Incident, right? How does that fling him into ignorance, fear, hate and religion; which has such a wide possibility of plot, suggesting anything can happen…
      What becomes his Objective GOAL a result of the Inciting Incident? What is the nature of action must he take to achieve this specific Goal?

      Where is your plot headed??

      Think in terms of a starting point and an end point.
      Good Luck Rick1973

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