Senior Hayden Duarte has it all: Scholarship to Texas A&M, the Brains, and the girls. But Hayden likes to bully people with disabilities. But when tragedy hits home hard, Hayden learns a lot about friendship, faith, and life.

The line. “When tragedy hits home hard” doesn’t draw the reader in, it’s too vague.

When his best friend is diagnosed with MS
When his beloved little sister becomes paralyzed
When his older brother loses both legs in Afghanistan.

Be specific with the “tragedy that hits home hard” and you will draw the reader into your story.