Posted: 2013-10-11T23:27:26+10:00 In:

Supernatural aliens come to earth seeking the one man who can save their species, so it's a good thing all Johny Beaumont ever wanted to do was leave home. But first he must do battle with The World, So it's a very good thing he is supernatural himself

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    1. I think you should set up Johnny a little more as to why he is “the one”; him wanting to leave home is not enough. If he’s supernatural, I take he discovers it in the script, so maybe you can say – Johnny discovers he has supernatural powers just in time to combat aliens who have come to earth in search of blah, blah, blah.

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    2. Singularity

      It probably isn’t good to have two different “Out there” concepts. You should chose between, “Aliens” or “Supernatural” because having both is a bit much.

      Other than that, it isn’t clear why your lead must “Battle the world” which seems important to the story so should be explained in the logline.

      Hope that helped, good luck with this!

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