A firefly seeks all forms to save his mother who was kidnapped by two greedy spiders. They use light of fireflies as decoys to attract insects, thus they get more food.

Hi there.

I take it this would be an animation? Sounds like an adventure story. I think the logline is a tad confusing as it reads right now. That the spiders use fireflies to attract food probably doesn’t need to be noted in the logline, the fact that you’ve said they are greedy suggests their motivation.

Instead, maybe you could give a hint to the firefly character (your hero) – is he brave and fearless or shy and timid? Is this adventure going to be a challenge for him (or her)? Perhaps you could aim more along the lines of:

“A young firefly must put his fears aside when he is forced to go on a journey to save his mother from the web of two greedy spiders”

Obviously if the firefly is fearless to begin with you could alter the wording to reflect this. Either way, try to suggest some sort of emotional and physical challenge.