Penpusher
Posted: 2012-07-31T19:55:37+10:00 In:

Title: Moose Crossing Logline: While investigating allegations of massive deforestation, John Bear, journalist, discovers a wealthy land owners? greed-driven attempt to speed up tree growth has accidentally created a new species–super-moose with an insatiable hunger for trees.

Title: Moose Crossing

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    1. Penpusher

      Great feedback, than you. I like the concise rewording and the additional character development of the reporter–a better character arc. The moose have a taste for humans instead of trees, whew, that ramps up the tension just a little. Thanks again for your feedback.

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    2. Sounds like a cool concept. Probably can shorten and tighten it up a bit.

      “A bumbling investigative reporter discovers a mill owner using an illegal formula that speeds up tree growth, but also creates a new species of “super moose”- with a taste for humans!”

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