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When a dedicated zookeeper ends up in an unorthodox animal shelter, she becomes fascinated by the back-to-basics-lifestyle of her unsociable boss and his adolescent son.

When a dedicated zookeeper ends up in an unorthodox animal shelter, she becomes fascinated by the back-to-basics-lifestyle of her unsociable boss and his adolescent son.
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    1. Singularity

      And then what? ?What becomes her dramatic goal? ?What does her fascination propel?her to do?
      And who/what opposes her?
      And what are the stakes? ?What’ the big deal about being “fascinated”? ?What existential difference will it make in?her life?

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    2. Singularity

      Agreed with DPG.

      I’ll add that a story is best framed within a set sequence of events: Inciting incident, action, and goal.

      What is the inciting incident in this story? What motivates her to have to take action?

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    3. Singularity

      I like the premise: ?If possible you might want to clarify what unorthodox means in terms of the shelter (If you can do it in just a few words, if it takes a whole paragraph then ignore this suggestion)

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