Horn of the Leviathan
Andrew BatesLogliner
When a timid janitor?s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact and uncover its power before the devil kills his lover and unborn child
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I would capatilize Devil. Otherwise you have nailed (what I believe log lines need) the Character/Conflict/Stakes info needed to entice a reader/producer to pick up your spec. Well done.
Like it man. Much more powerful with the personal stakes and you’ve worded it very well. Nice one.
When’s it out?
Thank-you
Honestly, it’s just a logline at this stage. I’ll be writing a beat sheet soon and progress from there. Once I have completed a draft etc I will contact Karel or the Shark-man to help me iron out the kinks. Months away, plenty of time to focus on the story and character arc. Cheers for all the help.
I like this logline, it’s direct and powerful. The only thing I’m left wondering if what the link is between the fire demon and the fact that the guy is a janitor. But other than that, nice work! 🙂
Cool. Wow. Enjoy the process man. Especially the blood, sweat and tears 😉