Horn of the Levithan
Andrew BatesLogliner
When a timid janitor's fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate the mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his partner before the devil's army scorches the earth.
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It does make it more personal, hey. I thought saying scorch the earth, that there is a bigger picture… but in saying that, a mans family is his future…thanks filmstar! Will revise the new one…
sure, I just mean ‘scorches the earth’ isn’t personal – cause everyone will die right ? if the devil’s army revenge is personal to the hero / lover – maybe it should be stated ? Dunno, just spouting ideas.
Great story 🙂
going for the R18+ are we? lol There is a back story that they demon killed the janitors parents, making him an orphan. Also his fiance is pregnant and he doesn’t know it til ACT 3. I think Its personal enough, cheers 🙂
hey I like it as it stands – and wanna see the film already ! However I wonder if the threat can be more personal – scorch the earth sounds bad, but if the devil’s army were going to gang rape her and sacrifice her to Lucifer before scorching the earth…
Maybe that’s a bit overboard !
Thanks, fella.
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When a timid janitor?s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his lover before the devil?s army scorches the earth
I like this a lot, dude. I’m just not convinced with the word ‘partner’ which hints at ”cop” – but what are the alternatives: lover, girlfriend, sweetheart, loved one…
Apart from that I think it rocks!
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When a timid janitor’s fiance is kidnapped by a fire demon, he must locate a mythical artifact, uncover its power and save his partner before the devil’s army scorches the earth