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Glenn Devlin
Posted: September 15, 20132013-09-15T14:54:28+10:00 2013-09-15T14:54:28+10:00In: Public

While appraising old and rare books at a restored colonial plantation, a book collector stumbles across a series of diaries that chronicle an alien visitation in 1781.

The Alien Diaries

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    1. Rhizomorph
      2013-12-09T10:53:43+10:00Added an answer on December 9, 2013 at 10:53 am

      Very cool idea, but the others are right that it doesn’t have the essential conflict yet. If this he has is this (what’s in the logline) there are a whole lot of ways he could go with it.

      The next thing to think of is why/how would this discovery cause conflict for the protagonist (assuming he is the book collector) and what is his main goal in the story.

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    2. W Siegfried Jerrett
      2013-09-17T09:09:43+10:00Added an answer on September 17, 2013 at 9:09 am

      totally with you, like the narrator scenes in rocky horror picture show, he is an interesting and entertaining part of the film, but would not be written into the logline

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    3. Nicholas Andrew Halls Samurai
      2013-09-16T12:41:42+10:00Added an answer on September 16, 2013 at 12:41 pm

      Yep – finding the book is POTENTIALLY a catalyst for your story (that certainly sounds like it could be interesting), BUT …

      You haven’t given your protagonist a goal, or stakes, or an antagonist trying to stop them. Which means there’s no story there. AND if the bulk of the story takes place in the past and revolves around the alien visitation, then the book collector probably shouldn’t be your protagonist, because he won’t have any way to influence events in the past, right? He’s sort of more your narrator – it’s a device you’re using to tell the story of another character, your actual protagonist, who lives in 1781. So you need to re-jig this logline.

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    4. 2013-09-16T02:51:10+10:00Added an answer on September 16, 2013 at 2:51 am

      Hi – the book book collector is the main characters – thanks! 🙂

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    5. jessica07
      2013-09-16T00:54:03+10:00Added an answer on September 16, 2013 at 12:54 am

      Good Idea Glenn, sounds like the making of something 🙂

      But Richiev’s right, it needs a bit more to make it a compelling logline.. More detail as to who the main character is and what he’s like, as well as a glimpse into what he attempts to do with this information would help readers visualise what kind of film they’re in for.

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    6. Richiev Singularity
      2013-09-15T17:32:31+10:00Added an answer on September 15, 2013 at 5:32 pm

      This is more of a set-up for a story than a logline, however it does set it up well.

      Is the book collector the main character or is it about a character in 1781?

      Just curious

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