A group of explorers discover a previously uncharted island, only to discover the terrifying reason why it wasn’t discovered earlier. Now, trapped, they must find a way to escape the island’s horrors.

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FFF · Mentor · 8,245 pts

Hello, the last rewrite is much better, still it seems to me that it's too vague to create interest in the reader.
I personally don't like expressions like "change himself in the process" because it's more a promise of what you want to do than a proof that you master your story. All movies show some kind of "change" so it's useless to talk about it in this vague form.

Former member · Singularity · 114,968 pts

Can you be more specific about what constitutes "terrifying things"?? I'm not suggesting you reveal everything, but you need to reveal enough to wet the appetite, to make a script reader curious enough to find out more..? And I don't think "terrifying things"? does the job.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Can you be more specific about what constitutes "terrifying things"?? I'm not suggesting you reveal everything, but you need to reveal enough to wet the appetite, to make a script reader curious enough to find out more..? And I don't think "terrifying things"? does the job.