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Do we need the first sentence?
Giving the story away is exactly the purpose of a logline -- not the ending, but the story.
Hey hey, I noticed, in the first sentence you give the lead a goal, (Getting his life back on track) then your second sentence doesn't relate to that goal at all. The logline seems disjointed as a result.
There are some good elements here and with a little twerking (OK tweaking but that's not as fun :) you could end up with a solid logline
Hope that helped, good luck with this!
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