A reckless, arrogant young Jewish hospital messenger rescues his relatives from the liquidation of the ghetto and becomes the last leader of the Warsaw ghetto uprising.

DPG:

Thank you for such a great answer! I will do as you wrote! Thank you for such words of support and enthusiasm, I also think I need to tell his story, and I have been reaserch to her since August, now it's time to act. I sit down to write a logline and correct it, I will post next versions with your comments and I hope for further suggestions from you.
Regards!

NicolasJ:

I thought so.

MAREK EDELMAN!!!

AWESOME!!? FANTASTIC!!!

I've read about his historic struggle in the Warsaw ghetto.? The awful life-and-death decisions he had to make.? I am aware there's? a documentary about him.? I've long wondered why there has never been a movie.

MAREK EDELMAN!!!

Yes, yes, you must tell his story.

The logline should indicate that the story is "based upon" or "inspired by" a real historical person.? In fact, you can name him in the logline? -- the singular exception to the rule that a logline should not have a proper name for the protagonist.

Drop the genre tag of "War" because a war story can be fictional. I suggest tagging it as a "biography" genre to clearly signal it really happened.? You're not making this up.

As for interweaving two story lines, I don't know.? Check out "The Imitation Game", about as well done an interweaving of two story lines of two periods in the protagonist's life as I've seen in recent years.

Whatever choice you make, the Warsaw ghetto story is the most compelling story line, the story hook.? It's the story that will sell the script, sell tickets. It's the one, the only one, that needs to be stated in the logline.

Very best wishes with your writing.? This is a film I want to see.

regards

NicolasJ:

I thought so.

MAREK EDELMAN!!!

AWESOME!!? FANTASTIC!!!

I've read about his historic struggle in the Warsaw ghetto.? The awful life-and-death decisions he had to make.? I am aware there's? a documentary about him.? I've long wondered why there has never been a movie.

MAREK EDELMAN!!!

Yes, yes, you must tell his story.

The logline should indicate that the story is "based upon" or "inspired by" a real historical person.? In fact, you can name him in the logline? -- the singular exception to the rule that a logline should not have a proper name for the protagonist.

Drop the genre tag of "War" because a war story can be fictional. I suggest tagging it as a "biography" genre to clearly signal it really happened.? You're not making this up.

As for interweaving two story lines, I don't know.? Check out "The Imitation Game", about as well done an interweaving of two story lines of two periods in the protagonist's life as I've seen in recent years.

Whatever choice you make, the Warsaw ghetto story is the most compelling story line, the story hook.? It's the story that will sell the script, sell tickets. It's the one, the only one, that needs to be stated in the logline.

Very best wishes with your writing.? This is a film I want to see.

regards

I am fully aware of the tragic uprising? in the Warsaw ghetto.? Is this based upon or inspired by the exploits of a real life person?

I am fully aware of the tragic uprising? in the Warsaw ghetto.? Is this based upon or inspired by the exploits of a real life person?

Thank you all for the answers, I'm going to work on improving the logline with your comments, I will post the corrected versions soon!