A Secret Service agent kills the President to save the Presidency. 20 years later, he must help save his estranged daughter, the newest President, when she is taken hostage.

The biggest problem is you have a really cool open shot and you are desperate for us to see it.

Link it to the story and it will make sense. Also stop with the cryptic sentence, does you no favours.

Improbabilities aside, my primary concern is that the logline presents two plots of co-equal dramatic import: 1] The assassination of one President; 2] The rescue of another President.? So what kind of project is this logline pitching?? A mini-series?? Because? it seems to me it would be quite difficult cramming both plot lines within one feature film.

Not to mention that? doing so would violate standard plotting convention going back to Aristotle's Poetics, that a plot should have unity of action, one organizing principle, one dramatic spine (action, motive, objective goal) on which all the other elements hang.? What is the organizing principle, the dramatic spine that unites both the assassination and the rescue?? What is this story really about?

Also,? the audience needs a justification for the assassination.? ?What was the protagonist's motive ?? To rescue the country from a corrupt President?? If so, the logline needs to indicate this.

Improbabilities aside, my primary concern is that the logline presents two plots of co-equal dramatic import: 1] The assassination of one President; 2] The rescue of another President.? So what kind of project is this logline pitching?? A mini-series?? Because? it seems to me it would be quite difficult cramming both plot lines within one feature film.

Not to mention that? doing so would violate standard plotting convention going back to Aristotle's Poetics, that a plot should have unity of action, one organizing principle, one dramatic spine (action, motive, objective goal) on which all the other elements hang.? What is the organizing principle, the dramatic spine that unites both the assassination and the rescue?? What is this story really about?

Also,? the audience needs a justification for the assassination.? ?What was the protagonist's motive ?? To rescue the country from a corrupt President?? If so, the logline needs to indicate this.