A small town sheriff must protect her town from a pack of ghouls that had for years been kept at bay by bodies supplied by the recently closed crematorium.

In this world ghouls do the crocodile thing of killing and letting it rot before eating (crocs do eat fresh as well, ghouls don't). This is a " cabin in the woods" style action film (so far, as it sits in my head). Possibly all set around the crematorium.

I am glad with the feedback. It appears the idea make internal sense. Flaws I can't plan. They show themselves during the draft. Every time I think I know the persons flaw, I end up changing it and rewriting. When I let them develop they don't seem pushed, just my process I guess.

Thanks.

What's the genre? Horror obviously, but is the story a mashup of horror and comedy? Or is it played straight?

I have no objection to placing the inciting incident at the end of the logline, but I think the plot could be reworded and in fewer words. Maybe something like:

A greenhorn female sheriff in a small town must fight a horde of ghouls after their food bank, the local crematorium, closes.

And, as Nir Shelter noted, perhaps the rules for this world need to be explained: how can ghouls turn from feasting on dead bodies to attacking live ones? After all, maggots don't feed on live flesh. But that's for the story proper.

What's the genre? Horror obviously, but is the story a mashup of horror and comedy? Or is it played straight?

I have no objection to placing the inciting incident at the end of the logline, but I think the plot could be reworded and in fewer words. Maybe something like:

A greenhorn female sheriff in a small town must fight a horde of ghouls after their food bank, the local crematorium, closes.

And, as Nir Shelter noted, perhaps the rules for this world need to be explained: how can ghouls turn from feasting on dead bodies to attacking live ones? After all, maggots don't feed on live flesh. But that's for the story proper.