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The hero does have a dramatic goal -- to achieve fame. And the inciting incident is related to the goal. People with HPD are sexually provocative and crave attention. Breakups devastate them and often cause dramatic outbursts from them since their significant other is pretty much saying they don't want them around anymore. It is feasible to think such devastation could lead them to do something drastic like drop out of school due to embarrassment or emotional damage. And like I said, people with HPD crave attention (bombshell Marilyn Monroe is often cited as an example). And if you're a sexually provocative woman in her early 20s looking for attention and fame, it is not a stretch to think you may wind up in the adult film industry. But thanks for the feedback. I'll think about it a bit.

You do state her goal is to achieve fame, but that seems so unrelated to the inciting incident that I didn't connect the two.

From my reading of the logline, it sounds like a documentary, not a feature film, because the hero has no dramatic goal we can see her trying to achieve and the obstacles that would keep her from reaching it.

You are correct, I miss read it.

All things to think about. I appreciate all the feedback you provided me. Thanks

Exactly how is it unclear?