Categories: Student Loglines
Cyber
If Katniss Everdeen is not the hero, aka: the protagonist, aka: main character, of the "Hunger Games" saga -- who is?
We are so obviously not on the same page as to the definition of basic terms, that I don't know what else to say. Except that by the dramatic conventions of modern cinema, while struggling to merely survive is a positive goal, it isn't enough to sell a movie concept. It isn't enough for a protagonist to escape the clutches of her tormentor, to run away. Eventually she must confront her antagonist (who, btw, is???) in a High Noon showdown, aka: the Obligatory Scene.
I'm not making this up as I go along. And neither are the others, FFF and Nir Shelter. Our concerns are informed by our knowledge of standard industry definitions and expectations.
I think you have a potentially interesting hook. I say potentially because "augmented" suggests something interesting, but I'm not clear as to what "augmentation" is. I think the nature of the augmentation needs to be made more specific.
And I suggest that the story that flows from that augmentation needs to be organic, causal. IOW: don't throw in a civil war just because you think it spices up the plot. There ought to be a clear, logical, cause and effect relationship between her being "augmented" against her will and whatever happens after that. Plot points should fall in sequence like dominoes.
I, for one, am intrigued -- but not hooked. I'm circling around the bait -- but not taking a bite.
fwiw
If Katniss Everdeen is not the hero, aka: the protagonist, aka: main character, of the "Hunger Games" saga -- who is?
We are so obviously not on the same page as to the definition of basic terms, that I don't know what else to say. Except that by the dramatic conventions of modern cinema, while struggling to merely survive is a positive goal, it isn't enough to sell a movie concept. It isn't enough for a protagonist to escape the clutches of her tormentor, to run away. Eventually she must confront her antagonist (who, btw, is???) in a High Noon showdown, aka: the Obligatory Scene.
I'm not making this up as I go along. And neither are the others, FFF and Nir Shelter. Our concerns are informed by our knowledge of standard industry definitions and expectations.
I think you have a potentially interesting hook. I say potentially because "augmented" suggests something interesting, but I'm not clear as to what "augmentation" is. I think the nature of the augmentation needs to be made more specific.
And I suggest that the story that flows from that augmentation needs to be organic, causal. IOW: don't throw in a civil war just because you think it spices up the plot. There ought to be a clear, logical, cause and effect relationship between her being "augmented" against her will and whatever happens after that. Plot points should fall in sequence like dominoes.
I, for one, am intrigued -- but not hooked. I'm circling around the bait -- but not taking a bite.
fwiw
And yet, I do not have to mention the fact that she is a hero or anti-hero in the logline at all. What she is depends on the goal and motivations.
Also, Katniss is just a symbol for the rebellion, and actually in the end kills the person involved in the death of her sister - revenge killing. The president dies by laughing (choking on his own blood). I fail to see how she can be considered a hero, more like a person just along for the ride. She doesn't even lead the rebellion in any way - it could exist without her after the second hunger games. Granted, they could have changed this for the movies (only seen the first one), yet people still found the story interesting enough to adapt them. I appreciate the discussion.
Anyway, back to my logline, I'm a bit confused as to which goal everyone finds more compelling (or if none of them are). Is her goal of surviving compelling/positive enough? I was told that the story needed something else to separate it from all the other chase movies out there - hence the addition of the civil war and the destruction of the facility to the logline.
