After his family is kidnapped and sold to English slavers by renegade Fante tribesmen, Ashanti tribal warrior Mwabo embarks on a perilous voyage across the Atlantic to the sugarcane plantations of modern day Jamaica in search of his wife and son, where he leads a slave rebellion against the tyrannical white masters to reclaim his family’s freedom and liberate his fellow Africans from the misery of enslavement.

"...There's a lot going on in this story to cram it all into." is probably the case with most writers and their loglines here and else where. But as mentioned above include in your logline only the bare essentials for the main plot to be understood and no more.

Inciting incident that made the MC of this description need to achieve his clear goal despite the obstacle/antagonist.

If the bare bones of the story work then the reader will understand how complex the epic saga is.

Hope this helps.

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