After receiving his late mother’s camera, the outcast son wants to become a photographer, but once his older brother, the glorified heir, dies, the manipulative grandfather resorts to blackmail to force his own grandson to take over the farm.

by davidnobles · Logliner · 370 pts 755 views

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FFF · Mentor · 8,245 pts ★ Accepted

Find your true inciting event, it seems to me that the story begins when the problem shows up, so when the granfather blackmail him. I don t think blackmail is the good word anyway. Focus on story, what happens?

Former member · Singularity · 114,968 pts

As Wayne said.? Why blackmail?

The whole blackmail gimmick doesn't work for me.? As a born and bred country boy, I?could get?enthusiastic about? the logline if it ?exhibited a more sympathetic understanding? and appreciation of rural culture and values, what?really?motivates rural folk to cultivate their land and?dream of passing it down from?one generation to the next.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

As Wayne said.? Why blackmail?

The whole blackmail gimmick doesn't work for me.? As a born and bred country boy, I?could get?enthusiastic about? the logline if it ?exhibited a more sympathetic understanding? and appreciation of rural culture and values, what?really?motivates rural folk to cultivate their land and?dream of passing it down from?one generation to the next.