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Thanks for all the responses. I knew this wasn't perfect when I put it up. All of your comments make sense, but the bigger thing I'm taking from them is that, despite this being too wordy, it doesn't convey the story enough.
Do either of these seem clearer and/or stronger:
1. A man reunites and falls in love with his childhood friend, becomes an accomplice when she kills a man in revenge, and will do anything to build what he things is a normal life around her increasing instability.
2. A man must reconcile his guilt from witnessing an arsonist set a fire that killed his neighbor when he falls in love with that neighbors daughter years later.
What is the writer's objective goal after murdering the arsonist?
What is the writer's objective goal after murdering the arsonist?
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