An intellectual farmer, escaping his rigid community whilst protecting his collapsing heritage, consorts with charismatic mystics whose growing fanaticism threatens his romantic relationship and farm, forcing him to oppose them and confront his alienation.

Goyonder:

It is not insignificant that the central character in a plot is? called the protagonist.? Because the job of the central character is to move??proactively towards his objective goal.? Alas, the central character in your plot is a "reactionist" -- for the bulk of the story he seems to be reacting to others and to his own negative feelings of alienation,.? I get the impression this he is casting about for an affirmative objective goal for the bulk of the 2nd Act when he should be pursuing one.

It seems to me that one of the defining characteristics of an objective goal is that it is affirmative.? ?That is the character, in effect,? says, "Yes,! This is what I want and I'm going after it".?

But the farmer's action line seems to be largely negative.? He's saying, in effect: "No! This is not what I want."

As a result of the inciting incident, what does he want to do?? What is his "Yes!" statement or intention?

If "finds kinship" is the inciting incident, that triggers main action line, the plot, "Oppose them" doesn't qualify as his objective goal because it is negative, rather than affirmative. And it is reactive rather than proactive.? He's responding to their "proactivity", when they should be? reacting to his "proactivity".?

And it is vague. We have no idea how he will oppose them.? And we have no idea what affirmative objective goal the foreigners are blocking him from achieving.

"Relinquish his ancestral land" is not an objective goal -- it's a denouement, an act of surrender rather than an achievement of success.? And "embrace his true identity" relates to his subjective need.? Subjective needs are a subtext to the script proper, but a logline concerns about the objective goal.

A logline needs to lay out an objective goal.? And defining characteristics of an objective goal are that is? proactive and it is also??affirmative. Proactive in that it is what the protagonist decides to do in spite of hostile circumstances and obstacles.? Affirmative in that he is saying, implicitly or explicitly, "Yes! This is what I want and I'm going to get it."

fwiw

Goyonder:

It is not insignificant that the central character in a plot is? called the protagonist.? Because the job of the central character is to move??proactively towards his objective goal.? Alas, the central character in your plot is a "reactionist" -- for the bulk of the story he seems to be reacting to others and to his own negative feelings of alienation,.? I get the impression this he is casting about for an affirmative objective goal for the bulk of the 2nd Act when he should be pursuing one.

It seems to me that one of the defining characteristics of an objective goal is that it is affirmative.? ?That is the character, in effect,? says, "Yes,! This is what I want and I'm going after it".?

But the farmer's action line seems to be largely negative.? He's saying, in effect: "No! This is not what I want."

As a result of the inciting incident, what does he want to do?? What is his "Yes!" statement or intention?

If "finds kinship" is the inciting incident, that triggers main action line, the plot, "Oppose them" doesn't qualify as his objective goal because it is negative, rather than affirmative. And it is reactive rather than proactive.? He's responding to their "proactivity", when they should be? reacting to his "proactivity".?

And it is vague. We have no idea how he will oppose them.? And we have no idea what affirmative objective goal the foreigners are blocking him from achieving.

"Relinquish his ancestral land" is not an objective goal -- it's a denouement, an act of surrender rather than an achievement of success.? And "embrace his true identity" relates to his subjective need.? Subjective needs are a subtext to the script proper, but a logline concerns about the objective goal.

A logline needs to lay out an objective goal.? And defining characteristics of an objective goal are that is? proactive and it is also??affirmative. Proactive in that it is what the protagonist decides to do in spite of hostile circumstances and obstacles.? Affirmative in that he is saying, implicitly or explicitly, "Yes! This is what I want and I'm going to get it."

fwiw

Thank you guys for your input. I find it super valuable.? I studied the Loglineit proposed formula regarding character, event and action and came up with this. Please? let me know how I can still improve or simplify.

When an intellectual farmer, alienated by his rigid community, finds kinship in high minded foreigners who eventually cripple his farm, he must oppose them and relinquish his ancestral land to embrace his true identity.