An over-ambitious aspiring author must focus significant time on long neglected relationships to improve his mental wellbeing all whilst struggling to meet self-imposed deadlines for his debut novel.

Hi Lotcher,

That is great. Sounds much better.

I wrote you another version anyways.

"To refine his mental health amidst tensions of meeting self-imposed deadlines, an over-ambitious author must revisit his long-neglected relationships."

I hope this helps.
Good Luck

Ben

Hi Ben,

Your response made me realise that part of my logline came off as unclear, here is a revision:

"An over-ambitious aspiring author must focus significant time on long neglected relationships to improve his mental wellbeing all whilst struggling to meet self-imposed deadlines for his debut novel."

Hi Lotcher,

How about this:
To help scope his ambitions and despite his efforts to meet all self-imposed deadlines, an aspiring author must take on non-fictional goals.

I hope this helps