EBABE finds success selling on Eworld Auctions, but now her life’s become a strange “eVenture.”

The play on the word adventure ("eVenture") is okay -- but not sufficient.? It's more of a blurb,?something that?teases?an audience, less??than a substantive?logline that?tells ?a movie producer what the plot is. That is,? it ?sets up a situation (sort of) for a story, but fails to clearly?indicate where the story is going.?

What is eBabe's objective goal? ?Who opposes her externally (antagonist) and? what jeopardizes her success internally (character flaw)?? ?What's at stake? - what does she stand to gain by succeeding, lose by failing?

The play on the word adventure ("eVenture") is okay -- but not sufficient.? It's more of a blurb,?something that?teases?an audience, less??than a substantive?logline that?tells ?a movie producer what the plot is. That is,? it ?sets up a situation (sort of) for a story, but fails to clearly?indicate where the story is going.?

What is eBabe's objective goal? ?Who opposes her externally (antagonist) and? what jeopardizes her success internally (character flaw)?? ?What's at stake? - what does she stand to gain by succeeding, lose by failing?

Hello, I m sure you have a great story in your mind and I like the idea of a movie about eauctions, but this is not a logline in my opinion. Try to check the training section on this very website or any logline tutorial on the web