Jasmine Cowl is pissed: 15 ago, she managed to save the world. Now she’s stuck in a boring, life, working for the CIA… not that CIA, the other one. Disgruntled gnomes, talking islands, and a car that seems to have taken a life of its own force themselves into Jasmine’s life as a hunt for a powerful wand turns her life inside out.

Got it - thanks for the feedback. As I mentioned in my first log line for a separate project (too short by far), this one is too long. I need to massage it a bit & try to repost. Also, I did read a ton of Fforde, but it was years ago :)

One moment you're telling us she's living a boring life, next sentence her life's turned inside out.

Start with "When", or "After" or "Before"- it gives the reader an idea of what the protag's life was life first; the rest will tell us why and how things will change. Discard character's name; unless they are famous, it's a waste of valuable logline real estate. You want less than thirty words, if possible...

It reads more like the blurb found on the back of a book. Also, I'm guessing you read a lot of Jasper Fforde.